Name: Tinyfeather

Reason: He was tiny as a kit, and he grew attached to an owl feather his grandmother gifted him. Most suffixes are based off of a cats personality, appearance or skill demonstrated during their apprenticeship so while feather does work, it might not be the best suffix.

Past names: Tinykit, Tinypaw

Future names: None

Gender: Tom

Age: 78 moons (Approx. 6.5 years)

Rank: Deputy

Clan: (Formally) SmokeClan - A used-to-be calm clan, until Leopardstar was promoted into leadership. Was founded by Ratjaw after they were exiled from PineClan. Ratjaw named the clan after their granddaughter, Smokekit, who didn't survive birth. Currently in StarClan. Interesting, though how old is the clan? What's the territory like? What prey do the cats here eat? What's their belief system on outsiders? Are there cats from other clans? 

Appearance: Green-eyed white tom with dark gray, almost black, patches splattered across the body. A rather short appearance, where more could be added such as his build, fur length, any scars he might've had and what his tail looks like

Personality: Understanding, selfless, somewhat impatient His personality is really short and doesn't paint a clear picture of what he's like. Try adding some more detail, and writing the traits out rather then listing them

Life goal: To change SmokeClan for the better. (Unsuccessful)

Strengths: Hunting

Weaknesses: Leopardstar, patience does he have any physical weaknesses?

Fighting: 7/10

Healing: 2/10

Stealth: 8/10

Speed: 6/10

Stamina: 10/10 general rule of thumb is to never put anything as a 10/10

Leadership: 7/10

Climbing: 3/10

Swimming: 1/10

Kin:Ravenstep - Scrawny and short white she-cat with blazing amber eyes and extremely long whiskers. Grandmother of Tinyfeather. When she was alive, Ravenstep was considered to be hard-working and dedicated.

Cedaracorn - Balding, black she-cat with ocean blue eyes and scars all over. Has a large, lean build also. Mother of Tinyfeather. Cedaracorn is now an elder, but when she was a warrior, she was disliked by her clan for being too bossy and demanding.

Goldencloud - Lithe dark gray, almost black, medicine cat tom with a slender build. Littermate of Tinyfeather. Much like his grandmother, he is hardworking and dedicated to his role of medicine cat. However, he could come off as bossy and rude sometimes.

Mentor: Aspenraid - Red-brown shy elder she-cat with a stumpy tail. She also has two front silver paws. It seems that Tinyfeather didn't like her much, so why were the two paired together? Did they work out in the end?

Acorn and raid are both strange suffixes(with acorn usually being a prefix and raid having never been used before) but since I don't know the layout and lifestyle of the clan, I'll assume that they have a different naming system from the canon clans.

I've never seen grandparents being mentioned so that was a nice touch, but his father is missing. I know his father was said to be unknown, but a section for the dad would've been nice because otherwise, I can't see the family tree working out. Goldencloud and Cedaracorn seem related enough, but not so much Tinyfeather.

The short personality is alright, though I don't see their personal relationship with Tinyfeather and what they were like.

Apprentice(s):

Heronstream - White, petite she-cat with stunning silver patches and emerald green eyes. you might want to take out the 'stunning' part

Dappledrun - Pale brown she-cat with extremely fluffy fur and a stumpy tail. Has sun yellow eyes. Mothering two kits.

What were their personalities like, and how well(Or bad) did they get along with Tinyfeather? Why were they paired together and how did it go?

Crush/Mate: He had developed a crush on Leopardstar, SmokeClan's leader, when he was alive. Her soft, silky snow white fur and dark ginger patches would drive him crazy. Unfortunately, Leopardstar did mistake him as the FoxClan deputy in the Smoke-Fox war, as he did look exactly like the rival clan's deputy, and killed him. That's....odd

Friends: He was on good terms with his kin, Goldencloud especially. Other than them, he didn't see any other cat as a "friend".

Enemies: I guess you could put Leopardstar here. Although Tinyfeather has forgiven her. anyone else?

Backstory:He was born to Cedaracorn and an unknown tom with Goldenkit. During his kithood, he never really got to meet his father, so he was mainly raised by his mother and grandmother. When he was apprentice aged, he received Aspenraid as a mentor. She was nervous, since Tinypaw was the first apprentice she'd ever mentor, and asked if he could have another mentor, believing she wouldn't do a good job. The leader at the time, Petalstar, refused and had Aspenraid continue to mentor him. So, assuming Aspenraid found out that Tinyfeather didn't want her to mentor him, how did that affect their relationship as mentor and apprentice? Did she get even more nervous? Was he resentful? 

Aspenraid was able to teach Tinypaw everything he needed and was able to have his warrior ceremony. There, he and his brother, got the names Tinyfeather and Goldencloud respectfully.

When Tinyfeather was a senior warrior, Leopardstar was ascended to leadership and chose Tinyfeather as her deputy. He was a decent deputy, fulfilling all his duties and such. I'll assume that he must've mentored beforehand since he had two apprentices, but neither are mentioned here. And, was there a specific reason he was selected as deputy? 

And, when he was 78 moons, SmokeClan went to war with FoxClan. He was in a battle with the deputy, until Leopardstar charged and killed him, mistaking him as the rival's deputy. Why did they go to war? And Leopardstar killing him sounds sort of unlikely. I mean, cats tell eachother apart by scent and it's a bit far-fetched to assume that they had the exact same everything down to a tee.

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That's it for this oc. Overall, Tinyfeather was ok; just with alot of missing detail in multiple places that I had alot of questions. I would suggest giving him a more detailed personality and backstory, including relations with his family and mentioning the cats in his backstory aswell; otherwise they seem just thrown in. I'd also go back and explain Smokeclan, and give it some more detail such as territory, prey, predators etc.