Brownfang circled around the entrance of the nursery. Bluewhisker stepped outside of the nursery, her head and tail hung down. "I sorry for you loss." She said calmly but sadly. "No!" Brownfang wailed and ran into the nursery. He looked down at his two newborn kits and his lifeless mate. "Oh...I'm so so sorry." He whispered in her ear. Bluewhisker entered the nursery. "We only have one other queen to take care of them." She looked over at Brownfang then at Flowerpetal. He nodded slowly. "I understand. Flowerpetal would you mind taking care of my kits until they are old enough to become apprentices."
"Of course I will. I'll do anything for Dewleafs kin." Flowerpetal meowed. Bluewhisker gently grabbed the two kits and placed them near Flowerpetals belly. The two kits started to suckle. "Have you any names for them yet, Brownfang?"
"Yes. The gray tom, Stormkit, in memory of their mother. And the brownish red she-kit, Flamekit, to remind me that love will leave burn marks that no one can ever see." Brownfang meowed, sorrow filled his eyes. The licked both of his kits on their heads. Then he left toward the entrance of the nursery and glanced back at his kits, Bluewhisker, and then at Flowerpetal. "Thank you." He flicked his tail then left. Bluewhisker and Flowerpetal were left alone in the nursery. "Take care, I'll check on you and the kits in the morning." By the time Brownfang and Bluewhisker had left the nursery it was already sunset. "Let all cats old enough to catch their own prey gather here beneath the pointed stones." Clawstar yowled from the pointed stones. Cats poured out of the dens and gathered into the cleared space below pointed stones. "We will all greive for our loss. Dewleaf was a mother and a great warrior, she has gone to join Starclan. May she watch us and guide us. Now we must sit vigil for her." As Clawstar finished speaking Dewleafs body was brought into a grassy part in the middle of the camp. Cats gathered around her body. She smelt of several herbs. By dawn only a few cats remained. The dawn patrol had just left as Hollybush, Halfeye, and Twistedfoot had come to fetch Dewleaf for her burial. Some cats still sat in the clearing as the three elders returned. Brownfang left camp soon after the down patrol returned. The forest was silent as if it knew that Dewleaf had left to join Starclan. Thunder boomed overhead and a flash of lightning hit a tree right in front of Brownfang....
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